I am all for citing poetry that supports a concept. However, language is more than making a point, and translating Rilke’s words without precision, for example, the phrase ‘my tiny tears bloom’ are Rilke’s words, your translation reads ‘let my hidden weeping arise’, Rilke writes: “let my streaming face make me more radiant” your translation reads: ‘let my joyfully streaming face’ Rilke writes: “Why didn’t I kneel lower to receive you” Your translation reads: “Why didn't I kneel more deeply to accept you”. Do you see the delicate mistranslating?
But Rilkes work is mastery that should not be co-opted. Who translated this? And how can we share a deep concept without having to hit all the pop language trends taking artistic examples from people who have lived fully, casting a light on our own unlived lives. Rilke wrote the way he lived. Brilliantly. No amount of retranslating his words to fit a social reality of lack will infuse people to his level. We are all responsible to history, and not being user of great work is one of those responsibilities. Thank you for considering my concern.
On Oct 22, 2023 Jean Fogel wrote: